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11 November 2015

the Bounty Hunter

I'm trying my hand at some flash fiction (short stories under 1,000 words long or thereabouts). here's my first try. please let me know what you think 😃




THE BOUNTY HUNTER
N. S. Mangion

The body weighed a ton..
      He’d been carrying it since the observatory. That was what, ten miles ago? He had at least as much left to go, probably more.
      “The hell am I going to manage this?” thought Kerrn to himself. He’d passed scav lairs on the way to the observatory. He was travelling slower now than before, his chances of outrunning them lessened. He’d have to take the long way around.
      “That’ll add a few more miles,” he said, rolling his eyes.
      The body was beginning to slump. He stopped, adjusted it’s weight on his shoulder. 

      The sack was getting sticky. He’d drained the body of as much blood as possible before leaving the ruined dome, but it was beginning to seep into the sack.
      Kerrn distracted himself with thought of the bounty that was awaiting him back home.
      It worked, for a while.
      He crossed dunes of dust and rust, even stopped a few times to admire the view, for what it was worth. It was a grey world he lived in, under grey skies giving the appearance of lifelessness. But he’d explored the wastes enough times to know that the surface was not always true. There was life out there, hiding in valleys and dead trees.
      He just had to be careful to avoid it.
      The wind was picking up, bringing the mounds of dust and rust to life about him.
      Kerrn stopped by an outcrop of dark igneous rocks and took shelter, fastening his duster against the wind. He rested for a while and when he broke his reverie he noticed his hand was on the sack containing the body. He regarded it for a moment, found himself thinking of the outlaw interred within.
      He shook his head, spat in the dust and carried on.
      He took the long way back, eschewing the trade road west for the roughlands that surrounded Fulcar’s Needle, a pillar of glass-like stone that dominated the region. It was his beacon, drawing him steadily west.
      Home.
      He saw it long before he reached it, straddling the coast of the Sekhan like a black bead caught between oil and water. The only settlement for miles around; it was his world. Inconsequential next to the capital, it meant nothing in the grand scheme of things, but it was all he cared about. He smiled for the first time in weeks and began the final leg of his return.
      Kerrn’s foresight paid off. He managed the road home without encounter.
      He found the east road and followed it to the settlement, taking a detour north that took him to the temple of the Machine Ascendant, and behind it the dross manufactory belching smoke. Around it stood row upon row of stone shelves in which were secreted tin simulacra of the dead.
      He entered the vestibule and caught the attention of a disciple who took the papers proffered and nodded, withdrawing into the gloom of the temple.
      Kerrn waited, looked around. His work brought him there often enough, though it had been years since he’d last been to mass. He doubted he’d be attending any time soon.
      A priest emerged from the shadows and walked slowly towards the bounty hunter pushing a gurney. “Another evildoer dispatched,” he sneered.
      Kerrn grunted and heaved the sack onto the gurney. “Just doing my job, Soth. Want me to tell you what he was wanted for?”
      The holy man waved the request away and took the gurney into his hands, ready to take back to the processors. “I need a name, for the records.”
      Kerrn shoved him a handful of papers, crumpled form the road.
      Soth took the papers, gave them a quick look. His eyebrows lifted for a moment and he looked at Kerrn.
      The bounty hunter looked at him, expectantly.
      “This is your brother.”
      “The law does not recognise blood, holy man. You of all men should know that.”


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Fulcar’s Needle: igneous formation in W Almagest, 20-miles N-E of the city of Almagest, The needle has a glass-like sheen, not unlike polished obsidian, and rises for close to 100-feet, making it an important navigational landmark.

26 December 2012

more NaNoWriMo news

A slight update on my NaNoWriMo story. I'm up to 135,000 words, though seeing as I'm still on a first draft, I suspect that will go down to around 100,00 with rewrites (unless I go the other way and end up adding more, which i think is doubtful at this point...), though i suspect the first draft to easily go up to 175,000 - 200,000 words...

I tend to write a lot of purple prose. To those who don't know what purple prose is, it's the use of extravagant flowery prose where simpler shorter words would suffice. I tent to over-describe things (at least I fear I might), so a good re-read and second draft will be used to snip some of the worst offenders. I can also use a second draft to polish themes that I came up with while writing, solidifying them in the plot; as well as deciding what knowledge my main character possess. The story is about the protagonist learning more about his past and the world around him, and since I sometimes write scenes out of order, I have to go back and alter what info he comes across as it can sometimes be inconsistent, with him knowing less in later scenes than he does in earlier ones.

One thing I've realised over the years is that my writing is mutable: i never stick to a single plot or theme, it's always changing as I write. Even with this story, where I had a pretty decent idea of what it was about and where it was going, with a bullet-point walkthrough of what happens, the actual writing almost always throws a spanner in the works. new characters, revelations through dialogue and other chaos all come together to change my well-laid out plans. in the case of this story it ended up making some plot changes about 40,000 words into it. Since I was still deep in NaNoWriMo, I decided to continue, taking the changes into account and then going back to rewrite that which had come before. I've currently paused progressing the story in favour of revisiting the opening parts to get them in line with the rest (this is also while I figure out how I'm going to get to the conclusion and climax, which I've been putting off for a while now).

I am enjoying writing this one, though still get doubts every so often - particularly related to plot and characters, though I'm not worrying too much at this point. The goal right now is simple: to get a raw story down on paper (or pixels, at least), beginning to end. Worrying about pacing, plot etc comes with later rewrites. I wonder what other changes will take place then...

I do think that NaNoWriMo has helped me keep to a timetable or deadline - during november itself, the 1667 target per day is what kept me going and i do think that without it I would have given up (I had more than a few days where i simply did not want to write but was pushed by targets and fellow NaNoWriMo's taking part in my region, leading to not only acheiving and surpassing my goals for the day but also churning out some of my favourite parts after a rocky start (which can be polished later on).

I'm hoping to get the first draft done by mid - late Janurary, which is great, as I'm going on holiday for a few weeks in early February. This will let me take a break (since I've been spending at least a few hours a day on this since the first of November) and allow me to get back to it with (hopefully) a fresh mind. I'll spend any free time i have taking ideas and other snippets that I mentioned in the story (which I've collected while writing, in a seperate document for ease of reference) and elaborate on them and add to my ever-building encyclopaedia. I might even give the raw first draft to a few people to read to give me a general idea of what they like (so i can reinforce those parts) and what they don't like (so I can rework them or scrap them entirely in favour of maybe something else).

Only time will tell!