I'm currently on the way to 100,000 words, probably 20-50k away from finishing the first draft. Much of it, perhaps as much as the first 20,000 words, needs full rewriting, as I was still figuring out structure and plot at that point. of course the rest of it needs a lot of polishing (I am yet to add the antagonist's thread to the plot, as I was keeping that for after, to add in as interludes between the main plot).
If I get enough progress done in the next month I might enter the Createspace/Google writer competition (word count allows for up to 150,000 which I think is doable. given the story), which only needs a pitch in January, rather than a complete novel. Those whose pitch gets chosen need to submit the first 5,000 words, and so on until a full manuscript is needed. No harm in trying :)
Here's a small dialogue excerpt (as always, raw and unedited) from about the midpoint in the story:
Hadiael was walking quickly against the rain, hurrying to reach the
land-ship before it grew any heavier. “I can’t stand the rain, the cycle of
rebirth and life it represents. Did you know that? Water evaporates from the
sea, becomes clouds and rains back down onto land, where it gathers in the
rivers and aquifers, trickling slowly back into the sea. Birth, life, death,
rebirth… an endless cycle. Sickening. Elyden should not be like that. She is an
old realm created from nothing and into nothing she will finally decay. All
this,” he said, lifting his arms to the loggias and bell-domes around him,
turning round theatrically, “Is for nothing. It aids the process of decay, you
know. Ripping the stone from the earth. Creates a greater surface area upon
which entropy can work its magic, you see! The bricks and stones rot quicker
than the raw earthy skin of this orb. Chopping down trees… well, the empire has
claimed a monopoly in that department. Few now live who know what green lands
look like. You might know, depending on how old you are.”
Slaven nodded. He had
seen wooded realms, long ago. He doubted any of them remained now, after
Korachan had lain claim to them, exploiting them, stripping them bare.
“These cities, great
symbols of civilisation are but a fleeting monument to the world’s entropy. In
a thousand years there buildings will be gone. The town itself might remain,
but it will be a different place, like a grub feasting on the rotting body of a
slain predecessor. And in turn that grub will grow and die. Another might replace
it but… well, you know what I mean. You have likely seen more death than any
other I know… save perhaps one.” The man grinned.
Slaven turned to him. “The
Lhauaparan.”
He grinned childishly. “For
over a thousand years that thing has existed, suffering. It has seen death as few
others have.”
“It has a spirit?”
Hadi regarded the clone
for a moment before replying. This is a
man looking for something, he thought. “What if it does? What if it doesn’t?”
“I am curious.”
Hadi shook his head. “No.
You might be a clone, born without nuance or social grace, but the tough years
have given you a semblance of mortality, of emotion that you cannot deny. I can
see the urgency in your words, your actions. It is more than curiosity that
drives you. I told you once already you will not find what you’re looking for
here.”
“And I must still try.”
Hadi raised his hands
defensively. “Be my guest. I don’t think Lhu has spoken with a Legionnaire before.
The exchange might do him well.”
“Lhu?” asked Slaven. They
would degrade such a creature, born of man’s most devious and accomplished
sciences to defy the gods themselves by referring to it with such a… base name.
Slaven did not know what to think. Was it any worse than branding the clones
with numbers and letters?
“Lhu, yes. He doesn’t do
much talking and was never christened by the madmen who made him.”
“You would imply I was
created by madmen?”
Hadi cocked his head,
sizing up the clone. “Someone’s got some father issues… Let us not waste any
time here. You, the Lhauaparan, haemonculi… all are attempts at breaking the
natural order of things, of bringing life where there should not be. You are aberrations
– beautiful in your way, but aberrations nonetheless – and, frankly, you should
not be. You were made by men who saw the demiurges and challenged them, defying
the natural order.”
“I thought you did not
believe in the Demiurges.”
“That would make me
crazy. Clearly, I am not crazy,” grinned Hadi. “No, we challenge their
divinity. A true god would be distant, alien, unknown. The Demiurges are many, fickle
and driven by emotion – often negative emotion – much as mortals. Their power
is not the thing in question, anyone can see that. But they are no gods, in the
sense of an omnipotent omnipresent entity. How can a god not be deathless? The legends
of this world are filled with tales of slumbering gods and their children,
their bodies fossilised and rotting at the same time, stuck in a limbo between
life and death, their dreams creating even when they cannot. That they can
create life is accepted; just look at the empire – filled with humans. How can
you deny the productiveness of Avraham with all these men running around like
vermin?”
“What is wrong with
creating life, then?”
“Well, aside from
moving us farther from the goals of the entropic cults, it is obscene. That man
thinks take that which makes the Demiurges special and twist it to his own ends
goes against the nature of everything. We are beholden to the Demiurges. We serve
them, through our prayer and devotion. They are the gods, the givers of life.
That they allow such travesties to go on is a sign of their own mortality. Then
again your opinion would be biased. You
only exist because of man’s arrogance. That you would inherit that arrogance is
to be expected.”
“It is not arrogance to
be grateful for life and to question that life.”
“What is there to
question? The age of philosophers is over. This is the age of decline, the
great dawn of our age. The days grow shorter, the sun weaker. The seas have
been retreating for millennia. The land itself weakens, as though whatever it
was that held it all together is unravelling. That this comes with the death
and torpor of the Demiurges is no coincidence.”
Slaven was nodding now.
“Remove Rachanael from the equation and the world’s collapse is ensured.”
“You catch on quickly
clone.”
They walked in silence,
the rain perforating their steps, giving life to the puddles. They were coming
to the outskirts of the settlement, where there seemed to be more people. The buildings
here were higher than elsewhere in the city, rising like vines along the inside
of the wall, their roofs serving as battlements. They passed through a large
gateway, the main entrance into the city, beyond which was the land-ship and
the Carnivale of Rust. There were people scattered around, mostly in the
distance around the periphery of the carnival. A few stalls were set up outside
the gateway, food vendors and other opportunists taking advantage of the
carnival.
Behind them, Voss and
Burrgh had slowed, hesitating at the gate. They did not want to proceed. Slaven
turned round, seeing them. “Wait here. I will not be long. If the weather eases
up, leave without me.”
Beside him, the tout
had an arm on his back, pushing him onwards. “Come, let us show you the wonders
of entropy.”
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